Lounged by my side
You shimmering molten gold
Your hands oozing warmth
And these are mine to hold.
My finger caressing yours
Tracing shape of your nail
My eyes searching yours
They’re telling me a tale.
A part of you is air
Or is that your perfume
They come from the same source
From flowers yet to bloom.
No one else matters
The world around is haze
You ripple through my body
In thousand different ways.
Sundaram Chauhan (Copyright © 2020)
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Amazingly beautiful! 🙏👏🌷
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Thanks so much 🙏
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Thanks. 🙏
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Such great descriptive language, I was seeing the lovers and smelling the perfume as I was reading it.
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Hey thanks so much for the lovely words. That’s all I could’ve asked for…for someone to feel it as intensely as I did…🙏
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Shimmering molten gold!
Such a powerful and beautiful metaphor you wrote!!
Beautifully written poem.✨💫
P.S. you can write flowers *yet to* bloom.
Just a suggestion.😊
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That’s actually a very good suggestion Chetna. What I had in mind was something very different, as in ‘left to grow to to their peaks, both women and flowers’ before being able to give off the fragrance that good, but yours is so delicate too. You might well see me changing it 😀…thanks a lot…🙏🙏
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Okay. It was just that when I read it and I again went back there and thought of this. So I just typed in my comment.
Glad to know that you are open-minded with these kinda things.😊😊 Pleasure, Sundaram.😁✨
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Why not? It definitely improved the piece. Pleasure is mine. Thanks, and keep blogging away…🤘🎼🤜🤛
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💜✨💫
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Good
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Thanks 🙏
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I love this. So beautiful and I could truly feel it.
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Then my job was well paid…😀…thanks for stopping by. 🙏🙏
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You are welcome
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Great one ..
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Thanks so much :-)🙏
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It’s perfect. 😊. Such a lovely moment captured in thought. I can feel the quiet of it. Beautifully written. 😊👍🌷
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Thanks Ellie…🌷… You always bring a smile along…good night…🙏🎼🙏
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Goodnight Sundaram…🙏🎶🌷
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Moving and beautiful poem! 😊
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Thanks so much 🙏 Glad you think so.😀
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You’re welcome 😊
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Loved it! 🙂
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Thanks so much 🤜🤛:-)
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Great piece. A poem that dances on tiptoes. I love it.
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Thank you…this comment in itself a poem. 🙏
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It’s beautiful!
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Thanks so much 🙏
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Very interesting, man y’all write good!
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Hey thanks so much 🙏 appreciate the kind words.🙃☺
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Winning creation 👍
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Thanks Subrata🙏☺
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Cool ending!
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Glad you liked it Benjamin. 🙏 Thanks again. 🤜🤛☺🎼🙃
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Welcome 🙂
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Beautiful poem, so descriptive and flows like a gentle river…
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Defined it so beautifully Karima… thanks so much 🙏
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It’s a pleasure to read you.
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Humbled Karima 🙏 hope to keep delivering writings worth your time in the future too. ☺
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You write beautifully. 😊✨
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Appreciate you reading the blog. 🙏 Wish you a great day ahead. 🤜🤛 Keep inspired. 🙌
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It’s beautiful ❣️ love this ❤️😍
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Thanks Astha…🙏🏵️🌸🙏
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Lovely❤️ Do see nd support my page pls🙂
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Sure. Thanks 🙏
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A wonderful poem.
Ansu
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Thanks so much. 🙏🙏
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Rippling – good images and sensations.
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Thanks William. 🙏 Appreciate it. 🤜🤛
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WOW ♥️ “You ripple through my body in thousand different ways”… my favourite… i could skip a heartbeat everytime i read it!!! Lovely
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So glad you felt it as intensely as I did. 🙏🤜🤛🙏
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Omg…you penned it so well🖤
Cant stop reading this piece..!
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Thanks so much Akshita…🙏🍀🙏 Appreciate the lovely words…☺🎉🌸🌸
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Beautiful Poem…
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Thanks so much :-)🙏
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